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i had a dream
with you you were in it
your soft hand was on my leg
your black hair was in my face
you said
your hair is in my face
and i giggled because yours was in mine
i said
your hand is on my leg and
she said
leave

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your hands are so
soft
/repeat.
i said your hands are
soft
/stop.
okay
is everything alright?
why do you always ask me that?
because you are sad
no, im not
just quiet. whats wrong with you?
nothing
how come you never ask me that?
because you always giggle
and seem happy
okay?
no
no im not.

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so listen,
lets dance.
hey, listen to me
just dance.
why wont you
look at me.
you have been
quiet for a lifetime
and i
cant read your
thoughts

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she jumped on
and said
go.
giddy-up
but the horse
wouldnt move
she said
"just like
a man"

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she alway said
im not the boyfriend type
i dont let myself
get attached
i dont go out on dates
im too casual for commitment
then he came
and he said the
same things. they made her
feel bad because
she loved him
she was the boyfriend type
she got attached
and wasnt
too casual for commitment
anymore

---

post
operative
wound
my
heart
was
left
to
b
l
e
e
d

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poems:
i wrote them last night
and i wanted them all to be together
i guess
so yeah
sorry if you are intimidated by the size
i assure you its an easy read....
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:iconallages:
allages Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2004
i came for birds & find some verses,
really happy to read this smart poem.

continue.:clap:
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2004
thanks!
im glad you like them both
:heart:
katie

xoxo
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two-forty-one Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2004
you know what im thinking right now, dont you....

:)
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2004
:)
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:iconerro:
erro Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2004
beautiful, simply beautiful
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boesboes Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2004   Photographer
i don't care about the poem when i see such a beautifull photograph!

WAAAAAUW
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2004
wauw thank you again
:heart:
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shescreams Featured By Owner May 25, 2004   Photographer
oh-so much better than you modestly behave. oh and i like the birds.
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 27, 2004
:heart: thanks
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JenMussari Featured By Owner May 25, 2004
I love the pic. Especially the birds, how they are white, and that one...the one between her lips.

Your words are so
genious
they fit together like the most perfect sets of tetris.
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 27, 2004
"like the most perfect sets of tetris"

i think your words do
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kakar Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
:heart:
:heart:
:heart:
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flyawaywithme Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
they are all good, great even.

2nd verse onwards.... the last line is immaculate.



free from fault or error
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
wow thanks
:heart::heart::heart:
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abztract Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
great work ^^ nice pic also :)
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
thanks :kiss:
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:iconcotty:
cotty Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
more awesome stuff :)

its getting better and better.
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
aw :heart: thanks....eee!!! thank you thank you thank you -muah- :kiss:
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breakfast Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
Hello. I don't usually read peoples poems because they tend to bore me for one reason or another but I always read and really dig yours. I like that iimage with it too.
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
thanks for reading my poems
i appreciate it
really
:heart:
katie
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augustmelody Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
Okay...
Every single one of those poems except for the first one brought tears to my eyes.
Its like you're me.
Like you wrote those (as me, but as you) because I didn't... because they all just happened, or have been happening, or apply to me in the most direct sense possible without telepathic support.
Or perhaps I'm being too sensitive, and the words you have written are more common feelings. Either way... :heart:
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maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
:heart:
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glitteryblackrose Featured By Owner May 23, 2004   Photographer
.. i really like the pic, not so sure if the birds are needed , but thats just personal opnion :)
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:iconmaria-in-motion:
maria-in-motion Featured By Owner May 23, 2004
yeah, i had already submitted it and didnt want it to be the same...and i really like the birds so yeah// but thanks for your comments! :heart:
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